when hes ready to shit im letin him go on ur yard

This is not rap right?
Is more like Spoken Word Poetry?

yo where did you get thiz beat from???
thiz beat tight,reminds me of a game man
and I feel la bossy
hear the beat,feeel the beat and then spit them lyrics
its like ya reading them from a paper
but ya got skillzz

I hear your words. Im feeling what your saying. But its more talking than linking words together. They have to flow into another. Thats one. The instrumentals need work also. Your song has no pull. That means you have some killer lyrics but its has to flow with the music too.I know you had a chorus,But i couldn't defreniate whats what. You need work.